They couldn’t. They couldn’t do this dreadful deed. Yet they had. And there was no way out. During my time at Shakespeare Park, it had been a bad day.
Trod, trod, trod. Sing, sing, sing. Trod, trod, trod. That’s all my parents had done. And yet surprising, it was boring. Why had they done this? Maybe all the adults were robots, but that was unlikely. We were stopped at the marvelous, breath taking waterfall. My parents wanted to look at it. How lame is that? For 15 mins we were stuck here with only leaves to play with. After that boring 15 mins Dad said “Alright lets go”. “Yay!!!” I screamed. Everybody looked at me but we still went trodding along.
Plop. Plop, Plop. Plop, Plop, Plop. That was the sound of a big, smelly, floppy sheep dropping. What by? Our feet. “Look!” said Dad. “A lookout!” We all sprinted (Mum and Dad walked) to the old adomened lookout. We decided to have our boring lunch here. We all had cheese, lettuce and tomato sandwiches. Disgusting! But now the good part was coming. Chocolate! Sweet, Sweet, Brown, Scrumptious chocolate! Looked in the bag. No chocolate. I looked in the rucksack. No chocolate. I looked in Mum’s handbag. No chocolate. So I hanged my head down in shame and headed to the beach.
Beaches. How could they be closed and blocked of? Impossible. Or so I had said. But this one was. A beautiful, colorful, glistening, shiny beach. And it was blocked off. What next? A giant, pink, dancing elephant? How could it be worse? So very slowly, I very sadly trundled towards the car.
The car. Home time. The best fun I had all day. Finally something good was happening. But looking back… What a boring day!!!!
Hi Emily!!!!
16 years ago
5 comments:
Fantastico! That was such a cool story Neil i could read it all day long. I can understand why you were so bored, staring at that waterfall for 15 minutes (boring).
11/10 Skyler :)
Neil, do you realise this is the best thing ever?! I've never seen anything like it! You have chosen your adjectives well. I also liked the way you split up your paragraphs. Keep up the good work!
Sam
Neil,
You have such a great 'voice' that comes out in your writing. This is very witty and you paint a wonderful picture in my mind.
I like the way you have used paragraphs.
Make sure you check your spelling before you publish. (old adomened lookout?)
Great work Neil, I look forward to your next piece.
Mr B
Neil's recount of this story is slightly different fom mine- I am of course'lame mum" who forgot the chocolate- or did I...... maybe dad and I ate it when he wasn't looking!!
Great story- great walk!!
Neil's mum.
An amazing report I thought it was like a real one I couldn't stop reading it. It was STUNNING!!! because it was really factual.
Rayfont rm9
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